Escaping the mass evacuation we had found ourselves at the bottom of Angel Falls. I cupped my hands and dipped them into the cool water. Bringing the water to my mouth, I felt the cold water run down my throat. Derek looked up at the throng of people shuffling across the wobbly bridge towards camp.
“We have about 20 minutes before they realize we’re gone, Kat.” He whispered. Our eyes connected, and we both knew that it was time to move on. In the distance the sky filled with smoke and the earth rumbled. Sirens and gunshots.
“Lets go.” I groaned. The echo of the leaders message rippled through the trees. This is the new order, if you chose to fight against the order, you will be taken care of. I grabbed his arm and we disappeared into the forest.
This is a response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Photo graciously provided by Etol Bagam.
Frightening to think of this really happening! Fantastic story! It gives me shivers up my spine.
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Yay! I love it when I get a visceral response!
It’s good to be back – I know I’ve been gone for a while 🙂
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I know, that’s always the point of the story. 🙂 You’re welcome. My pleasure!
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And so the escape continues… It’s frightening to think that events similar to this have actually happened, and people must flee for their lives. This piece is intriguing because it reads like the beginning of a longer story. You’ve left us wondering ‘what happens next…?’
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I have issues closing off my flash without leaving a “I wonder what happened” kind of vibe. Maybe I should extend it? Haha
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Now, extending it wouldn’t be a good idea on FFfAW. A few weeks ago, PJ asked that no one write serials in future. But you could always extend it on your own posts. I’m sure you could make a great longer story out of it. 🙂
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Yeah totally – not on here but maybe I’ll sit on it for a while to see what becomes of it – If anything
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Good idea.
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could definitely make a novel from this
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Oooo that seems daunting hahaha
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This definitely reads like the beginning of a longer piece. 🙂 A good story about frighteningly possible events.
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Thanks !
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